Creative ups and downs

Some parts just don't *pop* like the others, and it's hard to know how to get them to. I have a series of appointments written right when Jess opens her medical marijuana consultation practice, and they don't have any zing. Other parts just jump off the page. What is the difference?

The only feedback I've gotten so far from class this week said something about the medical lingo being too esoteric. I think this is a really common problem in medical humanities in general. Partially, I want to portray Jess as someone out of touch with regular people, and thus she talks over their head with jargon. But I also have to think about the viewing audience. I don't want them to be as annoyed as the patient.

I also have some fears that this script is too "sex, drugs, and rock and roll" for UCSF to be happy with it. It is medical, definitely, but I worry that the edgy, R-rated subject matter will put Pathway people off.

Onward!